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2007-11-02 06:52 am (UTC)
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Ooh, I liked this a lot: especially the beginning, you set the scene very well.
However, I think you referred to Ianto as "the Welshman" one too many times: it kept pulling me out of the story. :(
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However, I think you referred to Ianto as "the Welshman" one too many times: it kept pulling me out of the story. :(